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I'm writitng a letter to a friend about a vacation to Los Angeles. Is there a better way I can write it?

Dear Friend, My family and I recently took a two-week vacation to Los Angeles, CA and it were very astonishing. This glorious trip made Los Angeles one of my most memorable places. Los Angeles was a great city with numerous activities for various types of interests. Los Angeles was the least bit muggy and the scenery was majestic and beautiful. The weather was lovely and close to ideal, depending on if it had been a smoggy day, and we did have a few of those on our stay. The beautiful mountains, in Los Angeles, were made for very nice diversions. I also found that Los Angeles is a very busy place with tons of people and appalling traffic. There are also many, many side-streets that could lead you anywhere. Yes, there is a lot of fog, contamination, and traffic but what a fine city to go alone with that! Los Angeles has to be, by far, one of the greatest and unique cities in the world. Los Angeles had an incredible diversity, beautiful beaches and mountains, great nightlife, many wonderful museums and art galleries, and great amusement parks. My favorites became the Venice Beach Boardwalk with great canals and walkways, Third Street Promanade, Griffith Park Observatory, The Grove/Farmers Market, and the Getty Museum. We also visited the Los Angeles Disney World Resort where we had a wonderful time taking pictures, riding rides, watching fireworks, and enjoying every bit of entertainment. Along with that, we dined at five star restaurants that gave us a beautiful view of the Hollywood Walk of Fame. Los Angeles is and always will be a world of its own. Los Angeles has all the entertainment, activities, and excitement you can look for and that's what makes it so amazing. See, my family is into it all: biking, hiking, or anything outdoorsy. We are also into the hot night spots, trendy restaurants, and nice elegant scenery; Los Angeles had it all. We were fortunate enough to visit the various inner cities and beaches in Los Angeles. This place also had a ton of malls and shopping areas that were tremendously vast and different from what we see in a small city. This is the city where you can see and do many different things all at once. The two-week vacation my family and I took to Los Angeles, CA was absolutely amazing. The city has quite a lot to offer with the exciting night life, great restaurants, terrific museums, beautiful scenery and awesome. My family and I have traveled excessively around the world and there is no other city that compares to LA.

Public Comments

1. Grammatically speaking, it is a very poor letter with numerous errors. But if you just want to get a point across to a friend, then it is fine. Might want to take out some of the Los Angeles references though, you said it in the first paragraph where you went on your vacaction, no need to repeat it again, and again. Then your next three paragraphs start with it all over again. To tell you the truth, it looks more like a report for a school child.